Hey Bryan, really want this book to succeed which is why I’m going to be so critical of the illustrations. These illustrations are not good at all. There’s a lot of basic mistakes that a professional artist shouldn’t be making. One example: the muscle man’s torso : leg ratio changes between the two panels.
Keeping character proportions consistent is a basic competency you should expect from an artist, and having it be off in a draft this far along is a red flag to me.
First page is amazing, second page is good, last page the characters look a little strange. The perspective isn't quite right. Probably easier and no less impactful with just Sam and one girl but idk how easy these things are to change.
Panel three of page three: why is his waist parallel to the line of his ankles when his weight is on his left leg? Is his right leg that much longer than the other?
The art work really is amateur, I am sorry to say. It is really off putting, like Chick Tract levels of mediocre, not even bad enough to be funny.
First page is amazing, second page is good, last page the characters look a little strange. The perspective isn't quite right. Probably easier and no less impactful with just Sam and one girl but idk how easy these things are to change.
Echoing the other commenters that the illustrations are quite bad.
In the second page, you holding your face with your hand in the second panel is both a bizarre pose and one that at first glance makes it appear that your face has completely changed shape.
Lots of other problems, with the general quality being "so low that you should use a different artist"
My hobby was drawing. I agree with other commenters. p.3 with the chapter opening may be OK. I can hardly appreciate info/panel and drawing style in others.
Hey Bryan, really want this book to succeed which is why I’m going to be so critical of the illustrations. These illustrations are not good at all. There’s a lot of basic mistakes that a professional artist shouldn’t be making. One example: the muscle man’s torso : leg ratio changes between the two panels.
Keeping character proportions consistent is a basic competency you should expect from an artist, and having it be off in a draft this far along is a red flag to me.
Hm. As a happy owner of "Open borders" and a Weinersmith's patreon - I liked Zach's style more. More of an issue: the ratio info:panel seems lower :(
Still: looking forward to get my copy. :D
dont personally like the visual style of the art: it feels kinda average
First page is amazing, second page is good, last page the characters look a little strange. The perspective isn't quite right. Probably easier and no less impactful with just Sam and one girl but idk how easy these things are to change.
Panel three of page three: why is his waist parallel to the line of his ankles when his weight is on his left leg? Is his right leg that much longer than the other?
The art work really is amateur, I am sorry to say. It is really off putting, like Chick Tract levels of mediocre, not even bad enough to be funny.
First page is amazing, second page is good, last page the characters look a little strange. The perspective isn't quite right. Probably easier and no less impactful with just Sam and one girl but idk how easy these things are to change.
Echoing the other commenters that the illustrations are quite bad.
In the second page, you holding your face with your hand in the second panel is both a bizarre pose and one that at first glance makes it appear that your face has completely changed shape.
Lots of other problems, with the general quality being "so low that you should use a different artist"
Can't wait to see it. I just finished Brookings' "Fixer Upper" and so much applies in the Canadian provincial context, too
My hobby was drawing. I agree with other commenters. p.3 with the chapter opening may be OK. I can hardly appreciate info/panel and drawing style in others.
Good project, however.
Also the mice in panel 1 are not drawn properly!
Just kidding. Though I'm certainly not an artist, the criticisms in this thread seem, ahem..., overdrawn.